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| Dandelion from Pixabay |
Puff out the candle on the cake
Wandering wishes flower seeds
Unpredictable turns they take
Puff out the candle on the cake
Imagine bold new thirsts to slake
Separate basic wants from needs
Puff out the candle on the cake
Wandering wishes flower seeds
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Triolet quadrille (structured 44 words) written for dVerse Poets Pub Quadrille Monday (prompt of puff) hosted by the lovely Lisa of Tao-Talk.
Evocative verbal imagery, especially in combination with the picture. This is the kind of thing poetry is really for.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!
DeleteGreat use of form in the quadrille.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteAlways something to celebrate
ReplyDeleteSo true 🥳
DeletePaula, I love the effect of the triolet here. Reading aloud, it feels like casting a spell.
ReplyDeletep.s. I bookmarked your blog so will be able to get to it without a link now.
Double thanks, Lisa!
DeleteLovely use of repetition, rhyme, rhythm , even message ... and all in 44 words!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Rosemary!
DeleteOh these two forms work well together. 👍
ReplyDeleteA lovely quadrille. One of my favorite forms.
ReplyDeletePaula, it's so great so be reading you again!
ReplyDeleteI love how the candle line repeats like a wish coming back, while the flower seeds show how wishes can travel in surprising ways.
Much love,
David
SkepticsKaddish.com
Thank you, David! It feels good to write poetry again 🙂
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